Wednesday, January 29, 2014

Synopsis of Short Film

            Here we have Justice. He is in his mid twenties and he works at "We Can Have It," which is a shipping company. He works with his best friend Jay. Jay is slightly older and Justice thinks of him as a brother. Both are always at work each and every day. Their coworkers aren't so enthusiastic about coming to work every day and doing their job like they are supposed to. Their supervisor doesn't recognize Justice and Jay for their outstanding work ethnics, and always lets their coworkers do pretty much whatever they want.

            After a hard week of work Justice and Jay decide that they want to take Friday off since they are so tired. They tell their supervisor the plan, but the plan does not approve and strongly considers them to not take off because they are needed at work. Justice and Jay get upset with the answer and ask once more. The supervisor does not budge. Jay tells Justice that they should just take off anyways and that they will be fine and won't get fired for taking one day off. Come Friday, they are nowhere to be found at work. The supervisor gets angry and writes the two up and mails them their walking papers. Not knowing what has happened Jay and Justice spend their free Friday playing video games and relaxing. Refreshed and feeling a whole lot better, the two go back to work Monday. All seems well when they arrive and the supervisor doesn't say anything to them. They work hard the whole week, back to doing what they do best. Friday once again, but they already planned on staying for work this time. They both check their mailboxes and find a letter from their job. Justice opens his letter and reads it. He is disgusted and unimaginably angry with what has just happened. He calls Jay to tell him the news. Jay tells him that he too got the letter. They learned that their unreasonable supervisor had fired them the Friday they took off and that they had worked the whole week without pay. Jay wanted to go up to the job and cause havoc on the place and especially toward their old boss, but Justice insisted that it wasn't worth it and that they will find work somewhere else. Jay didn't want to hear it and begun his onslaught. Justice had an idea and brought the situation to the manager. After of which the manager took quick action and fired the supervisor immediately. The manager then hired Justice back and made him the supervisor. He asked about Jay, but the manager refused because of Jay's earlier expedition. Though sad about his best friend, he is grateful to be working again and now gets to do things the way he thought the job should have ran in the first place.

4 comments:

  1. This makes me feel some type of way, since I work at Fedex Monday to Friday. I'm almost certain you based this off the graveyard Fedex shift. I think you need a more clear climax. Like a bigger fight for Justice and Jay, and they almost lose before Justice gets his job back. And I want to know details on how they can work a week after being fired.

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  2. A. (1) 9.
    (2) I'm left thinking "what happened to Jay?"
    (3) It feels resolved, for sure.
    (4) The story does have a goal, but it's the characters' goal.

    B. (1) The story was pretty much crystal clear, almost all the main points were addressed.
    (2) The setting is understandable, but could be detailed a little more.
    (3) The characters are compelling and their goal is to get re-hired/exact revenge on their supervisor.

    C. (1) The story definitely feels complete, only loose end is that it's not clear what happens to Jay at the end.
    (2) Plot and character interactions were strong, setting could be improved some.

    D. I don't have any major criticisms, your film is pretty developed as it stands.

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  3. Impact - The format of your synopsis kind of turns me off from reading it. I'd suggest breaking up the second paragraph.

    Clarity - Everything was pretty clear. I would have liked some more background information on the characters.

    Potential - Story feels complete but what happens to the other character at the end?

    Overall Feedback - It sounds pretty solid and flows well. It's just the formatting of text that I don't like. :/ Overall I'd rate it a 7.

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  4. Impact
    1. 8
    2. I sympathize with it because such unfairness happens in real life.
    3. Involving story.
    4. Yes.

    Clarity
    1. Quite clear.
    2. Yes but it would add more to it if the place is described more.

    Potential
    1. Yes.
    2. Story, plot, conflict and outcome were strong.

    Overall Feedback
    1) Interesting story and its quite clear. Some parts seem extraneous taking away from the flow.

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